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Group 4: Vincent, Frederick, Dylan The topic for your process writing is:Taking the Lead Type out your process writing below. Have fun!


 * Mr Lim's Comments

A diary tries to give insight into the characters thoughts and motivations... What is motivating the General Sang Er Lo? A patriotic drive? A consuming need for power? Bloodlust? There is insufficient description to give readers a sense of what Sang Er Lo is like.**


 * Another aspect that you would like to consider is how would your reader react to what Sang Er Lo did. Your story is suppose to be about "Taking the Lead", it would presume that the character would lead the nation/ group/ people towards a better future. Would nuclear annihilation really help create a better future? As much "fun" as you think war is, most soldiers who have fought in wars refuse to even talk about it! (Google the lifestory of Harry Patch) Focus on developing the character of Sang Er Lo.**

Mr Lim**
 * Cheers,

A diary of a general to fight war. China v.s. Russia Federation The general is a person who cares for their men and will not let them suffers due to over-population.

20 April 2031-2230 hours I was the General. People had looked up to me. Since China was over populated, I, Sang Er Lo, had agreed to invade Russia as it had a big area. We planned to enter Russia by sea, land and air. It is also the country nearest to us.I told the B-30s to drop a bomb on all the airfields. I was hoping that our choice was worth it. We did this to weaken their defenses. Because they do not have any airfields just yet, they commit suicide by small ships it into our huge ships, and five of the boats have crushed into the Explosion and it sank. They think it was worth it but we continue to construct more boats and harbours near them so we can repair our boats faster.

21 April 2031- 0459 hours We had just reached Russia. The B-30s have dropped bombs on all the the airfields., even dropping atomic bombs on the capital, Moscow. Now, the whole city is in a mess. Uh-oh. The Russians are firing a rocket towards us! Retreat! Phew. That was close! Our battle ships The Repulser, The Detonator, The Explosion and last but not least, The Black Hind. The Repulser and the Explosion has just been sank off the coast of Russia. Yes! I had just blew up all the Russia's ships. Now, all our planes can transport food, water and ammo safely, something is obstructing us is that they are firing 10 missiles to our boat but we were too slow to retreat, the Detonator was left, bombing up the Black Hind. They continuing to build airfields!

22 April 2031-0459 hours We have now invaded a small part of Russia and is Borzya. We build a airfields there so we can build aeroplanes faster and is nearer to them...

23 April 2031-0900 hours Our tanks have been transported by our newest battleship, The Tomsk. My soldiers are crushing all the villagers house and relatives in sight. The tanks of theirs also came battling against ours to three to one. Though they have more soldiers and tanks than us but no fear. Our tanks are stronger than theirs and we flattened their army like pancake. Muhahaha! Now, I was summoned by my president to fight the war. I took our be15n

24 April 2031- 0932 hours I have sniped the president, his cabinet and all his bodyguards. Now, I could take control of the whole of Russia. I was screaming in to a microphone and my voice came out through the loudspeaker placed in everyone's house. I told them that I was their new master and had taken over the country. Now, I just have to fend off the people who come to help...

25 April 2031- 0632 hours Disaster! I woke up in bed to half the amount of my troops gone! I scanned the whole area for the rest troops, and yet there was not even a trace of them. As I would have suspected- they were captured! I knew that I was vulnerable to any attacks- any time. What was I to do? Although I had sniped the president, the generals of all the soldiers would come back and haunt me. I had to think fast. That's it! I shall send 20 spies and spy on their top secret documents...

26 April 2031- 0012 hours Today is the big test. If it doesn't work, this is the end of all of us. I don't care. I support Lieutenant Adnan Bin Saidi's motto and too, follow it. I too, rather die fighting bravely than to live in regret, not defending my country properly.

27 April 2031- 2303 hours Success!! I am so lucky. Our spy hero, Hong Jun Guan, has got their top secret escape document. Now, I can send more spies to get all the documents and tactics of killing us. I am crossing fingers.

28 April 2031- 2356 hours Disaster! Out of the 20 spies that I sent out, only 15 returned. Time for some serious work. I am now up in the helicopter having a great time shooting all the camps to smithereens. Oops! The general is using their Air Strike to shoot my helicopter but fortunately, I shot him on the stomach before he even called them in. Now, I am radioing the Air Strike to finish up the camp and the rest of the airfields. Yay! I am WINNING THE WAR! Praise the Lord!!!!!!

29 April 2031- 1200 hours Oh no! Half the Air Strike planes have been wiped of radar. What am I to do? I guess I will just have to bear with it.

6 May 2031- 1200 hours Since our spies have gotten all the information we needed, I and the other Generals have decided to bomb all the factories and have a massive rampage. We had planned to destroy Yakutsk, Surgut and Omsk, the three main cities. Muhahahahah!

9 May 2031- 0300 hours Alas! Beijing,the capital city had been bombed by a nuclear and plasma bomb. 20,000 innocent people had died. We were stupefied and we were panicking.

3 November 2032- 0500 hours Yes! We had won the war by dropping the 15 nuclear bombs on the whole of Russia. After so much blood, toil and sweat, we had finally won the war!!! Now, the Russia POWs can work for us. We will be rich, rich,rich!!!